User talk:Beast3020/sandbox

Citation feedback: Good citation and paraphrasing, but make sure you proofread carefully for capitalization etc. Colbuendia71 (talk) 15:53, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

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The formatting of the page makes it very clear that you're editing three different pages.

Johnson's Park

The first sentence is a bit confusing and it might run on a little too long. Perhaps splitting it up would be useful and the usage of commas can help with comprehension. This section is rife with opportunities to link to other Wikipedia pages, e.g.: Eldrige Johnson, Camden & Amboy Railroad, and Rutgers University–Camden. For some citations, you've placed them in the middle of the sentence and that might not be inline with Wikipedia's style guide.

Joseph Cooper house

There are many instances where the capitalization is inappropriate so do keep that in mind when copy-editing this for the mainspace. I was able to find some more information on who is maintaining the Cooper house: Cooper's Ferry Partnership. The link is a wayback machine link since the page appears to have been deleted in the last year or so. Here is another article on preservation efforts: Courier-Post.

North Camden

The notability of some of the old business establishments in North Camden could be low but since it is a history section, there can be some leeway. Glassknott (talk) 11:23, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

There's a lot of good material here that's well sourced, and I think we can easily find some material to move into Wiki's main space on Monday. There are some sentence-level issues pointed out by your other reader that deserve a look, but you have the general tone of Wikipedia down. I am concerned about your section on Johnson Park, however: it's out of date given that it's no longer a classroom but is instead the home of the Digital Commons where the WDL is located. You might imagine that I have a particular interest in having that represented! With the Cooper House section, look for ways to be more descriptive: what was the "third addition", for example? Colbuendia71 (talk) 15:49, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

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Your first section about Johnson's Park is very insightful. I had no idea about the park and you definitely gave a detailed history. The Joseph Cooper house is so great because that is truly the start of Camden. I hope they get the money to refurbish it. You should include a picture of the location. Seeing how much the Cooper family contributed to North Camden is interesting. Benjamin Cooper house it's a shame that the house fell victim to vandalism.

There's a lot of really good material here, and it's well sourced as well. There are a few places where it seems like information comes after the citation, such as at the very end of the article, the fire claim is unsourced. You will need to read for minor grammar issues: there are a few places where the sentences could be corrected or clarified just a bit. Overall, however, this is great work. Colbuendia71 (talk) 18:58, 2 May 2019 (UTC)