User talk:BeckAugust/B’s Histories of Gay and Lesbian COMM Studies, Communicating LGBTQ+ friendship, and LGBTQ+ friendships represented in media/TheguywiththePorsche911 Peer Review

As for your sandbox page, I think you did a great job overall. Every paragraph seems to be clearly structured. I think one thing that could maybe use some improvement is your lead in the third paragraph. It’s good but could be better if you rewrote it to seem more engaging. Your leads in the first two paragraphs are great so just use those as a reference. Another thing to mention is to link and cite your sources throughout your paragraphs to make the references easily accessible for others. I think the information you have in your all your paragraphs is great. The only thing I would say is to expand more on the ideas you put down, but that is me nitpicking.

TheguywiththePorsche911 (talk) 04:17, 16 April 2024 (UTC)


 * Hey T!
 * Thank you for the response on my sandbox page. I was pretty sick during the week we wrote this and the brain fog was horrible, thus I had a feeling my writing wasn't going to be too great. I'll take your notes into consideration when I go back to write my revisions. I'll also make sure to keep the lead sentences and use them with my revisions since they are good to keep. Thanks again (BeckAugust (talk) 18:31, 16 April 2024 (UTC)