User talk:Beckyjoyboller

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I am very impressed with how detailed and thorough your article is! There are only a few things I would note. In the first sentence you stated that she is “a dedicated computer scientist” which is more so an opinion than fact. You’ll be fine by simply describing her as “a computer scientist.” That is the only opinionated statement I found throughout your article, so good job on that. Also, I would suggest referring to her as “Carmichael” as opposed to “Gail” because it is more professional. Some technical things I would suggest are moving the first two sentences of your biography to be a part of your lead section (the first paragraph of most Wikipages that come before the bio), and since you have an awards section, you can just omit the awards you listed under the “Education” section. Also for your references, be sure to use the “Cite” button -- it’s super helpful. Lastly, there are some spelling and grammar mistakes, so you can just read it through and make some quick fixes. Overall, I think you have a solid article! Cfirm001 (talk) 21:58, 6 April 2018 (UTC)

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