User talk:Beesmill/sandbox

I am attempting to remove the two criteria in the dialogue box. I wish to not have the article written like an advertisement. I also do not have a personal relationship with the subject other than an interest in the topic. I really need some editing help or suggestions. Any editing I have attempted is designed to remove ambiguity and replace it with unbiased fact, while referencing / citing sources reflecting proper research. The wording is changed to read like a topic, not a destination. Would an editor please help make suggestions or even help edit the topic?

Thank you BeesmillBeesmill (talk) 15:29, 1 September 2016 (UTC)