User talk:Belagha/sandbox

--Sconnelly12 (talk) 20:07, 14 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I think you should add more citations throughout your page; just so the readers can find where you got your information from.
 * You should break up the information you already have into more subheadings that include: causes, sign and symptoms, diagnosis, epidemiology and research direction. There is a rubric on blackboard that breaks down each section for you to follow and know where to put each bit of information.
 * You could include the complications in the treatment section.
 * I like how you added associated syndromes!
 * I think it would be helpful to place links on some of the associated syndromes, if there is not a direct think through wikipedia, you can use an outside source.
 * Overall, you had a lot of good information that helped me understand what your disease choice was!


 * The first thing I noticed was that some sections are not included, such as "signs and symptoms". If you add a few more headings throughout the page it may help it be a little more organized.


 * The complications section was a little short, if there is nothing else you can add then maybe it shouldn't have this section. The whole page is a little short so I am not sure if there is not much research about this topic but if it is possible try to add more sections and add more to the complications section if possible.


 * The first sentence in the associated syndromes section kind of is unclear. I think it would sound better if you phrase it differently.


 * This is the first page I read where I couldn't find any grammar errors or spelling errors. I am surprised because the other articles had so many simple fixes and yours didn't. Your "see also" section was also appropriate, and I liked that it was at the end of the page because other people had it in the middle and that didn't make sense to me. Your information overall was informative but not hard to follow.

--Emily Lindquist (talk) 18:35, 18 November 2020 (UTC)

--Skumar25 (talk) 04:58, 16 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I liked your topic but I think that your page is not organized.
 * Dr. Weiner has a whole rubric to on blackboard - I think it will help you organize your page
 * Please add your research
 * Please add hyperlinks
 * Please add pictures
 * Please add bullet points in your text, it will so easy to follow
 * I think that there is not enough research and organization of your page and I am perceiving it as incomplete.
 * What I like about your page is your topic. I never knew about this condition before. I think that it's interesting.

--Sweiner02 (talk) 01:00, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I really can't give you feedback (or most of the credit) because you haven't modified from the original page at all.