User talk:Belainegreen/sandbox

Just added sources to a preliminary bibliography. If you have any suggestions or concerns with any of the sources currently listed let me know. --Belainegreen (talk) 03:00, 6 October 2019 (UTC)

I added a draft of what I plan on adding to the Boscotrecase Wikipedia article. There are four sentences that have been taken from the already existing Boscotrecase article to give a full picture of what my contributions to the article would be. They are all cited as being from this article. If there are any issues, please let me know. Also, for some of my citations, I used different pages from the same book or article. In the references section each citation shows up, despite some of them being the same source just different page numbers. Is there a way that I can condense my references to show the source once? Do I need to put in my sources within the article itself in a different way? Any advice appreciated. --Belainegreen (talk) 18:16, 27 October 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi Bethany! Great job on this. It looks like you've expanded a lot on the original article, and added some really detailed descriptions of the cubicula. I noticed a few minor punctuation errors in the "History of the Villa" section. I put my suggestions below:
 * "It is from this tile that 11 B.C. is commonly accepted as the date of the cubicula's decorations were done since Tuberones and Fabius, two of the names inscribed on this tile, were consuls in 11 B.C." The wording here is a bit confusing, "as the date of the cubicula's decorations were done" doesn't make much sense. Maybe change it to something like "The inscription on the tile also includes the names Tuberones and Fabius, both of whom were consuls in the year 11 B.C., allowing art historians to date these cubicula to the same year."
 * In the sentence "The inscription, "Caesaris Augusti femina mater erat" carved on a column shaft alludes to Julia," remove the comma after "inscription.
 * In the next line, change "when her son was not of age" to "until her son became of age.
 * In the line "When Agrippa died, Augustus became the owner of many of Agrippa's property," "property" should be changed to "properties".

The sections on each of the cubicula look really great! The only thing is, there's a lot of art historical jargon (peristyle, patrea, sacro-idyllic) that you might want to define for the average reader. Also, consider adding links to the relevant Wiki articles for each of these words.

Maybe consider changing the subheading "Discovery" to "Re-Discovery" (perhaps that's just a personal preference, though!)

Otherwise, it looks really good. Nice work.

Mar.nw (talk) 01:15, 26 November 2019 (UTC)