User talk:Benjamin.aviles1/Violent crime/Alexaneybold Peer Review

1. The first suggestion that the user Alexaneybold mentioned was to cite data and statistics that go past 2012. I think this is a beneficial suggestion because as we have talked about throughout the weeks leading up to this week, more recent data is always a good route to choose. It provides readers with the most updated statistics to show readers the present day trends of what is truly going on. So, one change I plan on making is updated statistics from the UCR, FBI and NCVS from 2013 to statistics within the last three years. 2. The second suggestion pointed out that there was one link that was not accessible to the full audience because I had used a University link. Although the user did not specify which link was blocked, I went through the links and citations and found that "New Zealand Crime Statistics 2009" was blocked. When I go to make edits, I will make sure to switch out this citation, and even update the source to a more recent year. 3. Another thing that this user pointed out was that I described what certain criminal justice terms mean. As I am doing my round two of editing, I plan on keep this in mind and possibly putting a link on words that may be hard to understand for readers. For example, when talking about intimate partner violence, I could provide a brief definition of what this type of violence includes along with the different behaviors that was associated with this type of violence (anger, short tempered etc.) Another example is making a clear distinction between terms that are similar but have minor differences such as abduction and kidnapping. 4. Another suggestion this user made is to add more countries to the article. More specifically, this users suggests no country be left out. While this is a good suggestion, I would have to contest this. The only reason being is because there are many questions to be answered about the direction of the article if every country was added. By adding every country, readers may lose interest in reading about every country. One way I could go about this suggestion is to group countries based on similarities. For example, some countries may be more prone to violent crime such as assault and murder while other countries are more prone to violent crimes that relate to sexual offenses and robbery. Another way I could categorize countries is by the way they retrieve statistics on violent crime. For example, countries who are more likely to depend on formal statistics like reported crime could be grouped together while countries who are more dependent on non-reported crime could be group together. These two ways of retrieving statistics are going to produce different results so it may be interesting for readers to see similarities and differences. 5. The user then suggests I leave out phrases before newly added content such as "the edit that could be after” or “so the edit could read”. This is a really good suggestion. When I am making my new edits and new added content, I plan on just going right into the newly added content and eliminate these phrases. I believe it will make the newly added content more understandable and there is a more smooth transition between ideas and sentences. Another idea I am going to consider that stems from this original users idea is to underline or bold the newly added content because I still want to make a distinction between the original content of the article and the newly added content that I plan to publish. More specifically, I especially want to distinguish the two areas of content if I plan on plugging in new content in between sentences. 6. The user then goes on to compliment the overall added content. The user explained how one strength was explaining the UCR and NCVS. An idea that stemmed from this user pointing that out is to go on to explain other sources of statistics mentioned such as the Bureau of Justice Statistics. 7.Another suggestion this user makes is to add in more graphs/templates. Using this suggestion, I plan to make an edit to the article where I have bar graphs showing violent crime statistics with more updated years instead of statistics from 2013. In order to avoid over information going through each country in relation to violent crime, I could simply put a bar graph of each country's violent crime rates to avoid underrepresentation as this user mentions. This suggestion also made me realize that graphs are beneficial because they are easy to read and also accounts for the readers who are better at comprehending information on a more visual basis instead of just having numbers thrown at them in a paragraph. Lastly, I just want to thank this user for taking the time to peer review my added content! I look forward to considering all of these suggestions when I make more edits to the article. Benjamin.aviles1 (talk) 01:59, 12 March 2021 (UTC)