User talk:BethanyJ1998/sandbox

Nia Dokes Peer Review
Hey, Bethany I really love the title of your article Undocumented Students because the topic is not really talked about in society. Also, I learned a lot from your page in terms of how undocumented students within the states they want to succeed and go to college in order to establish a future for themselves. In relation to human rights everyone has the right to a free education and why would anyone deny that just because they are undocumented? The spelling and grammar within the article is good, but I would say that you need to add some statistics to your article. Nia Dokes (talk) 01:15, 2 November 2017 (UTC)

Hey Bethany. I enjoyed reading about the different ideas for your topic. I think it would be important for you to add some statistics about success stories dealing with undocumented immigrants to show the positive cause and effect of your argument. When you go to format draft two I think it would be best fro you to actually write the article the way you want it to be posted so that it will be an easier read. It felt somewhat like a list in this draft. Overall I think your main points were really interesting, but be careful with bias. Good luck! Hasani Salaam (talk) 15:27, 10 November 2017 (UTC) Hasani Salaam