User talk:Bethelw4/sandbox

I think you have very informative parts of your potential edits about menopause. I would try to mimic the language and style of writing already in the society and culture portion of the wiki page on menopause. This will help integrate your additional information seamlessly to help people best understand the information presented. The edits as they currently stand sound like they're straight from the article rather than using the articles to draw from for objective information. Fixing this will help integrate it into the current article. I appreciate the fact that there is more variety in the cross cultural comparison of menopause in your potential edits and I think this adds a level of depth and credibility to the society and culture page that already exists.

Neahg (talk) 22:03, 28 November 2018 (UTC)Neahg

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Thank you for your input. I will revise more as you suggested! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bethelw4 (talk • contribs) 06:20, 30 November 2018 (UTC)