User talk:Bharrison111/sandbox

Hey I am trying to figure out how to write in your sandbox and I am not sure if this is the right way. Ooverholt127 (talk) 00:50, 14 February 2019 (UTC)

Never mind. This is the talk page. I found it Ooverholt127 (talk) 00:52, 14 February 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review by Cayla Crowder
Peer Review by Cayla Crowder

Lead -introduced the artist, what his inspiration is, and his medium-great facts! -I like how you used a short paragraph to introduce the artist and then went into his Early Life and Education. -Having the short paragraph at the beginning hook me into the rest of the article.

Structure -I am really impressed with how y’all have the article organized-you have gotten a lot done. -The titles are clearly labeled with larger fonts and underlined. The subtitles under Exhibitions allows to viewer to find several his exhibitions in a quicker way. -With the first paragraph it says, “…he creates light three-dimensional environments..” The term “light” is confusing to me here. -The last paragraph in Early Life and Education: “He began at Carleton College but after switching to become an art major, he decided wanted to switch to an art school.” Maybe say: But after switching majors to become an art major”; I think to need to add a ‘he’ between decided and wanted

Balance -Just a suggestion: Under exhibition, you talk about the artist’s career. Maybe you should have a separate section for career?

Neutrality -I did not feel any source of bias coming through in the article. A lot of facts were given and explained well.

Sources -Sources are cited throughout the article. Sources include books, interviews. -Just making sure their were not any online sources. The links did not send me to any online readings.

Overall, I am impressed with all of the work you have completed. The organization works really well. The table of contents is nice for the viewer to reference. There were only a couple of sentences that I found grammatical mistakes, which I explained in the ‘structure’ section of the peer review. Seeing your article gives me inspiration of how to organize my article. Also, don’t forget to add photos! I think it would be a nice touch to have photos of some of his exhibitions for the readers to reference. Great work guys! Caylacrowder (talk) 01:22, 7 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review: Abbi: The work you've done so far looks impressive. I would keep adding information as it does seem a little sparse, especially in the Early Life and Education sections. It seems like y'all know the most about his exhibitions since that's where you focused most. If you have the information I would add a bit more to the Water Blocks section. Overall though, it seems like you're on the right track and know what you're talking about. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bharrison111 (talk • contribs) 01:23, 17 March 2019 (UTC)