User talk:Bharve9/sandbox

Hi BHarve9! I was very impressed by your article draft. It is evident that you have done your research and put a lot of time and effort into the article. The information is clearly stated and interesting! I do have a few suggestions you may want to consider. In some areas the writing could be slightly more concise. For example, under Causes, I think certain phrases could be eliminated without losing any valuable information, such as "(or somehow get off the ground)" and the description after the article title "Warming Climate to Hit South Asia...". The organization of the article is very well thought out. The only suggestion I have would be to consider moving the last paragraph under Causes to the Future section. A few other little details: Add a period after second sentence under Past. You might want to add a source somewhere in that section as well. Don't forget to add links to other Wikipedia articles if you can! Overall, great work!! Jchappuis (talk) 17:30, 24 October 2013 (UTC)

B.J.Carmichael Feedback
You have researched your topic extensively and showing how the floods can have wide-ranging effects within the region. I am concerned about how the information is stated and some of the references. The contribution needs to be fact-based, so re-phrase/remove statements that do not have support and are bias. This is especially necessary for statements regarding climate change. Be sure the focus is on the flood and information included in your articles supports that focus. For example, more connection needs to be made for the mules. Perhaps it is an issue of organization of the information. Be aware of grammatical errors throughout. Consider linking to other Wikipedia pages to further expand the topic. The contribution is shaping out to be a good article. Keep it up! B.J.Carmichael (talk) 20:25, 6 November 2013 (UTC)