User talk:Big Añu/sandbox

Peer Review
Hello, I am reviewing your article "Mediated Communication" and I have a few points I would like to mention:


 * One of your sources is a textbook (Choices and Connections). Its best if you don’t rely on it. If possible, find a primary source to cover the topic instead.


 * "Mediated technology need not be computerized" is worded a bit weirdly. Can you rephrase that?


 * I feel like face-to-face communication is bigger topic than mediated communication in the article. Can you find any other information to place in without comparing the two? I feel like the article is more of a comparison between the two rather than just being about Mediated Communication.

Question and advice:


 * Are you placing the “Compared to Face-to-face Communication raw and unedited” section in your article?


 * If you are, break down the comparisons so that they are easier to see. Make each comparison point its own paragraph or something of the like.


 * I really like that Comparison section though.


 * For the Mediated Communication article, I see that you took out some paragraphs on your Sandbox. Will you be permanently deleting them or will you be placing them in another paragraph?

I am excited to hear your response. -T15311327 (talk) 22:34, 13 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much for your feedback. I apologize if my edits aren't clear. I'll try to find another source to supplement the textbook, but do you think that there are any other problems with the sources? I will fix minor errors like what you mentioned eventually. I'm focused primarily on content right now. I understand that my plan for the article seems to be dedicated only to comparing mediated and face-to-face; The article is short to begin with. I don't know if you've noticed, but I will also add a section dedicated to modern media types. Hopefully that would make the article less dedicated on comparison. The "Compared to..." section in my sandbox is not finished. I will plan on adding it to the article once I organize and polish it. I haven't worked on organizing that section yet, but I'll see what I can do to make each point clearer. I would also like to mention that I did not remove anything from the original article. I only moved one paragraph into another section. Sorry if that wasn't clear. After writing this I will include information for the second section and add working citations. I appreciate you suggestions. —Big Añu (talk) 16:21, 14 November 2017 (UTC)