User talk:Bill545

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Cancer
I have temporarily removed your edit to cancer because I'm not sure if they constitute an improvement. You should not remove information from the lead section because it serves to summarise the article. The section you rewrote was sourced and comprehensive, and my view is that the new version suffered from a touch of "dumbing down". Please discuss on Talk:Cancer if you wish. JFW &#124; T@lk  19:11, 15 August 2011 (UTC)

IMO the summary initially is more than a summary but largely a duplication of what is repeated later, but no big to me and didn't mean to "whack" anyone's handiwork.
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Re the section I rewrote, I did so as it was an inaccurate reflection of its own link in at least one important way: it says cancer is mostly due to environment, when even the link it references says enviornment AND lifestyle. Since environment and lifetstyle are 2 very different things, leaving out lifestyle is inaccurate and misleading. It also puts far too much emphasis on air pollution as a cancer risk when in fact extremely few people (approx .004%) develop cancer from that per the ACS. Only primary or "significant" factors are being listed, so that one probably should not.

No idea how I "dumbed it down," as if anything I added more to the section to further clarify. If you can elaborate on what you mean I'd appreciate it. Also keep in mind the lowest common denominator thing. :)

Thx for quick reply in any event; appreciate what you're doing but pls consider what I'm saying.