User talk:Bilschne/sandbox

Maternity clothing peer review:

The first sentence that begins with “maternity clothing is worn by women in some cultures…” — this should be “are” rather than is. I notice some grammatical errors throughout the article. Specifically, the victorian era paragraph has sentences that could be improved. “Women spent a lot of time in the state of pregnancy, giving birth to an average of eight children with five making it through infancy.” This sentence for example is very awkward especially where it says “women spent a lot of time in the state of pregnancy.” Women STILL *spend* a lot of time in pregnancy and it goes without saying how long women remain in the “state” of pregnancy. Lastly, throughout the article there is more awkward wording such as “pregnancy fashions.” The sentence should have started “maternity clothing.”