User talk:Biologybabbino/sandbox

I think the intro needs a little bit more work, the first sentence starting “This gene drive..” Is a little awkward as a starting sentence, I noticed that you removed most of the original section form the introduction.. so I was a little confused. For the research section, I think it’s best to start as “Daisy drives are a relatively new topic….” And get rid of the because.

These two sentences : research needs to take place in closed systems in research facilities so the change doesn't affect wild organisms. Research is preformed on closed systems on organisms such as yeast, fruit flies, mosquitos, and rapidly evolving nematode worms. [2]

Could be arranged better, perhaps:

research needs to take place on closed systems on organisms such as yeast, fruit flies, mosquitos, and rapidly evolving nematode worms [2] in research facilities so the change doesn't affect wild organisms.

I also think a visual could also be really helpful, besides that it is a great article!