User talk:Bjones9/sandbox

The Lead section is strong and immediately introduces the topic/artist. Majority of the language used sounds "encyclopedic," but there are a few typos and misused sentence structure. The lead sounds objective and unbiased, but sounds a bit colloquial. It may help to make the lead sound a bit more formal.

Good job siting sources and knowing how to use wikipedia I'm impressed...

There is not table of contents or sections/sub sections, but I assume that'll be added later :)