User talk:Bkhokhar/sandbox

Peer Review: Angelica Madera Wow! I think the information you have covered is very substantial and critical in understanding the topic addressed. It for sure clarifies the gaps on the article you chose to edit. I think more citations and sources would make this information much more credible. Using multiple sources will especially increase ethos. Also, some minor grammar errors are present (but I understand it's a draft, so no worries!). Overall, keep up the good work!

Peer Review: Alicia Villalobos Tovar Like Angelica stated, I think that the historical/general information you have is clear and the topic is addressed. I know you stated how this goes on to affect boys in the future, so adding that information such as any psychological and developmental effects this situation has on the young boys would be great to have. Additional sources would be of great help as well if the reader wants to learn more about a certain topic you talked about. The present day section is also a great addition to see how different the practice has looked like over the past few years and why that may be. My final comments would be that you have a good start! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Avillalobostovar (talk • contribs) 10:10, 30 November 2020 (UTC)