User talk:Blooming sunflower

Welcome!
Hello, Blooming sunflower, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Sonya Ballantyne
Major revisions needed. Chronophoto (talk) 14:07, 22 October 2019 (UTC)
 * Nice work finding an important filmmaker who is not yet on Wikipedia. However, major revisions are needed before you move this work to mainspace.
 * References: The TEDx talk and Code Breaker Films sites are not independent and IMDb is not reliable. Add at least two additional reliable and independent secondary sources. Use the library’s subscription databases.
 * Add more information about the Winnipeg Free Press article in the References section, including the date, title, and URL.
 * Make the bold headings into official headings. (Select the text, go to “Paragraph” and change to “Heading.”)
 * Refer to the filmmaker by her last name, not first name.
 * In the Early Life section and anytime you relate her feeling and thoughts, preface with context: e.g. “In a 2017 TEDx talk in Winnipeg, Ballantyne stated that…”

Response

 * Hi! The template you described is just your sandbox template that marks it as a work in progress - to fix it all you need to do is remove it. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 05:15, 3 November 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi!

Actually, I was not assigned to edit your article, but one of my assigned articles is unavailable, so I just assign myself another article randomly. Overall, I think you did a great job. You have a nice lead paragraph and a clear structure, but there are still some revisions needed. I only made some small changes, and here are my suggestions about how it can be improved.

Firstly, it seems that you do not have enough reliable sources. You mainly cited from TEDx Talk which is all about how Ballantyne described her own life. I recommend finding more reliable sources about how other people described Ballantyne’s life and making your article more neutral. Secondly, if you cannot find other sources, you can dig more information with the sources you have. For example, according to your reference, "Rising Star - Sonya Ballantyne," it mentioned that Ballantyne “recently won the 2016 Short Film Pitch competition at ImagineNative Film Festival” which you did not include in your article. In addition, there is an unavailable link in your reference list. Please correct the red error. I hope that my advice would be helpful to you!

Happyjujugirl (talk) 01:30, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Your draft article, Draft:Sonya Ballantyne


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Thank you for your submission to Wikipedia! UnitedStatesian (talk) 21:42, 12 May 2020 (UTC)