User talk:Blue993/New sandbox

Peer review
Your draft is well written and your contributions weld neatly with the pre-existing text. One thing I did notice was that in the folklore section, your creation myth part begins talking about facts unrelated to the creation myth. I recommend placing another subheading to differentiate the two; although, I have a feeling you already knew about that judging by the extra spacing between the two paragraphs. The sources being used seem solid and the lead gives a good introduction but doesn't overlap with the remaining contents. More hyperlinks could be implemented to help readers. Other than this, I believe your draft is really good and keep up the good work.


 * Jdecker8 thanks for your positive feedback, this gives Blue993 a great place to start! Sarah, we talked a bit about this in class yesterday, but remember to utilize the UH library sources to your full advantage to keep strengthening the quality of this article. One of your citations is formatted incorrectly, so make sure to adjust that, and see if you can find more sources that are recent to incorporate (Strong 2009 is a good, recent source). Lastly, I would work on clarifying and condensing your lead section - it's a bit long right now for such a short article; try to be as succinct and straightforward as possible here. You've done some really excellent work so far (it's no small feat reorganizing an existing article), so keep up the great work! Gardneca (talk) 18:31, 18 April 2019 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the feedback! I've been trying to edit the incorrect format for my citation, but I'm not quite sure how to do so. When I try to edit it with wikitext, the citations under the References Heading disappear. Do you happen to know how to edit them? Thank you! Blue993 (talk) 02:56, 19 April 2019 (UTC)


 * Blue993 switch from the source editor to the visual editor, click on the initial footnote for that source in the main text (3) and click edit. Let me know if that helps! Gardneca (talk) 03:38, 19 April 2019 (UTC)