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From Dr. Cohen: I really like the addition you are proposing to the article on aging in Japan. I think that you have some ideas on this based on last week's reading. Be sure to use primary sources. You can find some in the article we read on Global Aging but there are likely other sources as well.

Bm06493 peer review
Great addition by adding a global perspective to aging. It's awesome to see how different countries "do" aging as opposed to the U.S. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Shunter12 (talk • contribs) 02:16, 7 March 2018 (UTC)

It is a pleasure to see someone adding on another country besides the USA. The organisation of your edit is as accurate as it can be. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Olori94 (talk • contribs) 14:15, 7 March 2018 (UTC)

I like how you added the factors that can contribute to aging, that were not included in the original article. It was extremely organized and thorough. It was a great addition to compare aging in different countries to that in Japan, it gave me more perspective and context as the reader. - CCRivers — Preceding unsigned comment added by CCRivers (talk • contribs) 15:59, 7 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review Response
Thanks for all the feedback regarding my article. Since everyone seemed to approve of the content and organization of the addition, I will focus on elaborating and perhaps including another source. The section on comparisons with other countries seemed to receive more positive feedback, so it might prove beneficial to focus on further development of the government policy section. In the original article, this section was did not provide much information and I only added on a little utilizing just one relevant source. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bm06493 (talk • contribs) 00:58, 21 March 2018 (UTC)