User talk:Bmalg641/sandbox

I would avoid claims involving "everybody knows this," rather merely present empirical information relevant to the findings you are presenting. In the same vein, omit "The future of preventive nutrition looks very bright, and it can only get better from here." "And all due to his impeccable diet for the past 20 years or so." Avoid having the word "and" at the beginning of a sentence. This is also a claim, one that would be impossible to prove, so omit.

Avoid repetition. Under the Athletics subsection the claim that athletes do not know about their nutrition is repeated multiple times, as well as the claim that nutrition affects whether they remain on the field.

I'm not sure if a question for a subheading is appropriate for this format, so rework Why is it Overlooked? Again, omit the "everyone knows" and like claims.

"Having a sustainable diet is the reason many people do not eat healthy; they are always on the road and eat McDonald’s far too often." Omit this sentence, not scholarly.

"However, people who are not considered to be in the poorest class, but do not have enough money to eat healthy food all the time have one simple solution. Grocery stores.  Going to the grocery store and buying a lot of healthy food in bulk will end up being less expensive than buying fast food every day.  This is a huge loophole which many people do not take advantage of because they are too busy or do not want to cook.  This is the largest factor overlooked by many and needs to be taken advantage of much more than it currently is today." Consider consolidating and rewording this group of sentences, presenting the point you are trying to make and no more or less. "...one simple solution. Grocery stores." Does not feel like an appropriate tone for Wikipedia. Gurleyneu (talk) 17:42, 13 April 2021 (UTC)