User talk:Bmccann5/Mobile phone use in schools

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You have added quite a bit of material that is making the article better. I have a few additional suggestions:

- The lead section is bloated and redundant to the sections that follow. I would move some of the pros and cons from the lead section to the Pros and Cons sections.

- Suggested edits to introduce more balance (see capitalized words): An increase in access to technology COULD DEVELOP essential WORKPLACE skills SUCH AS rapid searching, browsing, assessing quality, and synthesizing vast quantities of information. [1] In addition to helping develop 21st century skills, mobile phones MAY provide ACCESS TO a wide variety of mobile apps USEFUL FOR both teachers and students in the classroom.[2]

- To the opponents or cons section, I would reference Jonathan Haidt’s new book, The Anxious Generation. He calls for a cell phone ban in schools.

- Move this sentence to the front of the paragraph: “Different countries across the world have had to respond to the increasing presence of mobile devices in schools and weigh the potential harms and benefits all while maintaining their privacy laws.” Lndmayg (talk) 14:54, 6 April 2024 (UTC)