User talk:Bmharden2/The Vanishing Half

Peer Review

 * The changes made to the colorism section significantly emphasize the effects colorism has on the book's characters. The examination of acting and performance is particularly intriguing as it demonstrates how figures like Kennedy and Barry employ control through performance. Of course, the narrative becomes much more complex when it explores the topic of racial passing. The novel's primary topic is covered in its beginning portion. It draws attention to how the town of Mallard was founded by people with fair complexion, which resulted in an obsession with fairness and contempt for others with darker skin tones. The story also touches on Desiree's connection with a dark-skinned guy, which the community disapproved of, and Jude's experience of being teased because of her deeper skin tone. In general, this passage examines the impacts of colorism on the characters in the book.
 * The subject of acting and performance is the main emphasis of the second paragraph. While certain characters, like Kennedy and Barry, are briefly mentioned, it also emphasizes how other characters, like Stella, perform on a regular basis to shape society's perception of them. This passage explores the complex nature of acting and how it affects the lives of the characters. The subject of passing is covered in the third paragraph, with a focus on Jim Crow culture. It sets this book apart from others that paint passing in an offensive way by emphasizing how Stella's choice to pass away enables her to leave her village and follow her aspirations. It discusses the motivations behind passing, including avoiding discrimination and racial degradation. The complexity and motives for passing in the book are examined in this line. To put it briefly, every paragraph in the draft explores and examines a certain subject, illuminating the problems of colorism, performance, and racial passing and how these affect the lives of the characters. Nothing in the text should be changed in my opinion. It's well-written and does a good job of expressing the topics covered in the source material. The changes you made give the topics of colorism, performance, and racial passing greater depth and understanding.

Jashongriffin123 (talk) 12:31, 30 November 2023 (UTC)