User talk:Bmm9/sandbox

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Overall your page was very good. Below I have written some suggestions for adding links and pictures, as well as a few suggestions for sentences that I think may sound better if reworded.

You can add a wiki link to Queen's University, McGill University, University of Texas and all the other university pages that you have not linked to ..

In the Personal Life section I think you can reword the phrase "He is survived by his wife....". You could say "His living relatives include..." or something like that In the Academic Career section I think the sentence "Amsel received recognition for his academic contributions to psychology including the Howard Crosby Warren Medal for Outstanding Research in Psychology, and was inducted into the National Academy of Sciences in 1992" could be reworded ... you could put received much recognition... and induction into the National .....

In Hull and Spences Learning theory I think "In his book ‘’Behavior Theory and Conditioning,’’ Spence argued that discrimination learning takes place by establishing connections between specific stimuli and responses, reinforced by a reward when the correct response is given." can be reworded, maybe add a when so the sentence says ... when reinforced by a reword upon a correct response... or something along those lines Also, maybe you can find a basic picture of a behaviourist stimulus response diagram to put in this section..

In the developing frustration theory section you can link to extinction with extinction

In the behavioural neuroscience section you can link to the wikipedia page on Behavioral neuroscience, also you could add in a picture of the hippocampus and limbic system to this section. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lms.sworth (talk • contribs) 00:28, 29 March 2013 (UTC)

peer review
Great introduction referencing his important contributions to the field of cognitive science. I would only suggest putting the sentence about his death in the biography section, seems out of place.

Academic career section is extensive, you have a lot of great information about it. Might be easier to read and follow if in bullet lists. Perhaps a time line list of his careers, and a list for the different recognitions he's received as well as a list for things he was a apart of.

It was a great idea to include the section on learning theory since his theory was developed from that. I would suggest a link for neobehaviourism or a definition of it. I would also suggest a link for implicit or a definition of it.

For his frustration theory could put the four stages of frustration into a table for better organization.

Perhaps you could be more clear about what partial and continuous reinforcement are as well as maybe defining reinforcement

overall great information in all the sections and very neutral Point of view, not being biased by including criticism as well.

reviewed by: Hayley Ewener — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hpsych3139 (talk • contribs) 17:30, 3 April 2013 (UTC)