User talk:Bmyers015/sandbox

Article evaluation
Brian, it seems like this one might be a good article to work on when you start to add citations and text. Kquave (talk) 18:50, 11 September 2018 (UTC)

Sparkle's Peer Review
The addition is pretty straightforward and adds relevant information to the article. Some suggestions I have for writing is as follows: 1. how did President Obama condemned the group after they protested his second inauguration; 2. give more information about the low and high protesting the Westboro Baptist Church has done meaning that you need to explain what are low and high profiled events and list examples of deaths they've protested like for the military; and 3. You mentioned the "Respect for America's Fallen" bill, but not how the Westboro group has response to it, hence you should so it can tie the bill into the overall article (unless the article already speaks about this then it's fine). Your edit was good overall, but just needed some work to add for clarity. — Preceding unsigned comment added by SCMark (talk • contribs) 20:49, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
I like how you incorporated a citation at least once per paragraph, and how you made additions to several sections of the article.

Some suggestions/criticisms -Instead of "Sandy Hook Elementary School Shooting or the West Nickel Amish School Shootings," I would suggest "Sandy Hook Elementary School Shooting and the West Nickel Amish School Shootings." -"Through keeping the protests non-violent and acquiring the proper permits, the Church is efficient in its efforts to protest." This sentence sounds opinionated, so I would suggest rewording it or using a word other than "efficient" to describe the protest efforts.

Other than those suggestions, I would just recommend doing a quick read-through for grammatical errors such as commas or switches in tense. --Nayah116 (talk) 23:52, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
In total, you used a straight forward and neutral tone to describe a highly controversial group that many Americans know about today. It is difficult to speak neutrally about a person/group's actions when the vast majority believe he/she/they are undoubtedly wrong. Some suggestions I have for you is to maybe add more to each section you added to with the effects. For example, when they protested Barack Obama, were there, if any, affects on the Church itself? Same with the Bush administration's law shielding funerals from protests. Were there any statements made by the Church? This would offer their counter perspective on an article written about them. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nicholas grant18 (talk • contribs) 13:06, 21 October 2018 (UTC)