User talk:Bnchow/sandbox

Monte's Peer Review


 * The introductory sentence is a great summarizing statement.
 * I don't think the second sentence needs the word "but" or the comma before it.
 * Thank you for the clear definition of "functional:" I think many will benefit from it.
 * Some of the terminology used may be unnecessarily advanced, such as "aesthetic" to describe a type of diet in the section "Weight-Related Factors."
 * "Exercise-Related Factors" is one of my favorite sections because it's so interesting! I had no idea that that statistic was so high for female athletes, and that the phenomenon could occur in males as well.
 * The last sentence under "Reproductive Health" makes an interesting point, but is quite long and may be more clearly understood if broken down.
 * The third sentence under "Bone Health" should have the word "is" omitted.
 * I appreciate the statements that more research is needed at the end of certain sections such as "Neurological Health," as these seem to be novel and potentially controversial.


 * I think the organization of the article is clear and concise.


 * I am a bit surprised to see what kinds of and how many references you have cited in your article. I understood that we were supposed to use mostly meta-analyses and systematic reviews in our project, as randomized controlled articles and more subjective research are not necessarily unbiased. Your article is very informative and interesting, nonetheless.


 * Since there basically was no "existing article," I think you made an excellent selection for your assignment and improved it marvelously.


 * I would like to give you a tomato in person.