User talk:Boomersooner16/sandbox

A start with good scientific content. The draft needs some careful editing for brevity of prose, references, and filling in the notes. Nephologue (talk) 17:48, 7 December 2020 (UTC)

Hi Matt, nice job on the draft, I was able to follow along easily and the draft contains useful information. A few feedback points on the first few sentences. Great idea bringing instability up, may want to consider also explicitly mentioning orography and what that means within the first sentence of the draft. One easy way to help define is to also add the hyperlink that would take the reader to the orography page on wiki. Similar feedback to the topography part, would be useful to add the link. If you have any questions, please let me know. NH Noah.hirshorn (talk) 16:17, 28 November 2020 (UTC)

Nice first cut of the draft! I was unaware snowflake differences occur depending what side of the mountain you observe; great addition. Most of my feedback pertains to the first paragraph: Great topic idea! Keep up the great work. UMightyMet (talk) 00:40, 30 November 2020 (UTC)
 * In your first and second sentences, I believe it's more typical to address "stability" as opposed to "instability". i.e. "...number of factors such as the stability of the environment. Mountains and hills play a large role in affecting the stability of clouds, promoting instability by lifting moist air..."
 * Nice inclusion of the various factors specific to orographic clouds that determine crystal type.
 * In your sentence referenced by Schneider perhaps consider hyperlinking "deposition" (there's a deposition (phase transition) wiki page) and "accretion". Also, "riming" in the following sentence.
 * Lastly, in your 3rd to last sentence in your first paragraph: "The location on a mountain also can affect..." consider rewording to "The location relative a mountain can also..."

In addition to what has been said, I would drop the last paragraph starting with ‘These mechanisms’. The section above that is a well rounded description as is and the last part could easily be a whole new section. Really enjoyed the seeder/feeder description and was easy to follow along. Joayer (talk) 01:56, 30 November 2020 (UTC)

Overall, I think it's a good description of geographic precipitation. I have a few edits to suggest: Baudette (talk) 17:13, 1 December 2020 (UTC)
 * "Snowflake growth is sensitive to a number of factors such as the instability of the environment. Mountains and hills play a large role in affecting the instability of clouds by lifting moist air and condensing it into clouds." this could be combined into one sentence.
 * "The seeder feeder effect occurs", add the dash between seeder-feeder for consistency
 * "Depending on the phase of the water in the "feeder" cloud, the growth of nuclei in the "feeder" cloud may occur via water vapor deposition or riming in the case of ice crystals."
 * "collisions of ice crystals in clouds and therefore increases snowflake growth and therefore snowfall rate."
 * is there any figures that could be added to show the seeder-feeder effect?

Very easy to follow along and cited accordingly, great job. Here's a few suggestions: Mpletch1 (talk) 22:11, 2 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Would it be possible to discuss downscaling in the second paragraph since you discuss how coarse resolution makes it difficult to predict orographic effects?
 * As stated above, add some hyperlinks for in-depth terms.

I enjoyed reading this: very well-written and succinct summary of this complex topic. KYsnowmaker (talk) 07:50, 4 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Steenburgh's book, Greatest Snow on Earth, might be a good reference for your first couple sentences.
 * Your sandbox article and your target article of Snowflakes both were written with a Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level of 12.6, so they have similar style and complexity, which is excellent.

I thought this was well done, had not previously known the specifics of the orographic precip gradient. Would it be worth it mentioning how this plays a role in affecting precip further leeward from the mountain? PaulMcGlynn (talk) 14:46, 8 December 2020 (UTC)