User talk:Botjanitor/sandbox

The beginning(Before early life)
You can add a hyper link for doctor and president to their own wikipedia pages

I think it is best to write the "NAACP in full" before using the abbreviation even though you hyperlinked it. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Biggboss420 (talk • contribs) 03:06, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

I believe in the beginning you should just mention a significant work he did or accomplished that he is known for after describing who he was.

Early life
"where he received his A.B" and "He then went on to earn his M.D". I believe you are trying to say Bachelors of Art and Master degree. It might be best to write it in full with the abbreviation in parenthesis since it has not been mentioned on the page before then use can use it as and abbreviation if the need to use it again arises later.

"They were regular and active members of the Saint Augustine Episcopal Church nearby." This is true but do you think the reader needs to know about this? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Biggboss420 (talk • contribs) 03:03, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Career and Civil Service
I like this section. You touch on the important and notable works that he did.

This was really well written! You had a good use of sources, as well. I had no idea Wiggins contributed so much to the school district,so I will definitely be utilizing that source The only nit-picky things I would point out is that, referring to his education, A.B. and M.D. could be internally linked. I had no clue what an A.B. is and I didn't know I expected a link there until it wasn't there. Your tone is good, very neutral, and lends well to Wikipedia's style. Even the the first sentence is straightforward and contains his achievements. I think that for this topic, Wiggins is extremely relevant. I wish there was more information on him to fill out the page, though. This biography looks like a genuine Wikipedia biography. I know you are well-versed in code, so that isn't a problem. Overall, this was very nice! I look forward to what else you could add to his biography.Meerturtle (talk) 10:45, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Hey, this is such an excellent first attempt at really writing for Wikipedia. I honestly have very little to say besides the fact that it's more or less ready for mainspace. The phrase "well-respected in his community" veers a little close to being an opinion. Maybe something about being a community leader instead? Overall, however, this is excellent material drawn from very few sources. Great work. Colbuendia71 (talk) 19:41, 23 April 2019 (UTC)