User talk:Bp908/sandbox

--73.110.78.2 (talk) 04:39, 14 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Abstract should not have a heading. It just shows up at the top.
 * "The skin lesions may become a cosmetic concern in the future, since the treatment with cortisone cream will only help with the itching." - confusing. I'm struggling to understand what you're trying to say here.
 * Nice overall summary in abstract.
 * Link terms to other pages. Some things, like hemoglobin, you can just link and not define on your page.
 * Why is hemosiderin in symptoms and not mechanisms?
 * There are a number of awkward sentences and minor grammar issues. Get some help with editing, if possible.
 * Other than the missing recent research summaries and some linking and editing, this looks really promising. Well-cited, detailed, well thought out.

Taneisha- Abstract: The summary was good you provided a concise summary, definition and key features. The only thing I suggest is provide statistic or epidemiology of this condition. Diagnosis: Explain cut off values for tests performed in diagnosing this condition if applicable Treatment and Prognosis: List the statistic on how rare T-lymphoma is associated with your topic. Recent Research: provide a short summary for each link shared. Overall good job!

The summaries for the both nice and straight forward, good work. I would suggest to add "links" to other wiki pages within those sections along with the others. There are a few grammatical errors to correct. I also suggest on adding some "media" whether it be tables or even pictures, I think it will add a lot to the page. Each section has great information, and is cited well. keep up the good research and the page will turn out great. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pdesai93 (talk • contribs) 16:14, 14 November 2017 (UTC) PavanDesai — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pdesai93 (talk • contribs) 16:48, 14 November 2017 (UTC)