User talk:Bportis/Palermo

=Evaluations= Good work. I like your topics for this article.

02/23/2018 Evaluation by caleb26
caleb26 (talk) 01:15, 23 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Points: 37/40
 * Grade: 93%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly Meets Standard

Film

I would suggest exchanging the comma used between Palermo and Paolo for a colon. The reason I suggest this is because essentially the two names are part of a list that explains the prior independent clause. I might also suggest changing "...A film centered around..." to "...which is centered around..." So, in the end it could look something like this (if you want to maintain the original structure): "Another film that took place in Palermo was Cadaveri Eccelinti (Excellent Cadavers), which is centered around two prosecutors from Palermo: Paolo Borsellino and Giovanni Falcone."

Another aspect that could be changed is the last sentence of the film section. The part that says: "...and the film's premier was at the Venice Film Festival." could be adjusted to say "and was premiered at the Venice Film Festival."

Literature

In the first sentence it is likely that "...the subject of many books..." was intended to be used instead of "...the subject to many books...". In the same sentence is also likely that "were" was intended instead of "where". So if all the changes were made it would read like this: "Palermo has been the subject of many books, and many renowned writers were born and have lived in Palermo." The use of "Palermo" at the end of the sentence could be seen as redundant but when it is removed it seems to affect clarity.

Language
Meets Standard The tone seems appropriate for Wikipedia.

Organization
Meets Standard The organization of the culture section into two subsections of "film" and "literature" is evident.

Coding
Meets Standard No errors.

Validity
Meets standard There are not any statements made that stand out as being invalid.

Completion
Meets Standard The assignment calls for ten sources and two paragraphs of text: both are present. At least two sources seem to be academic journals.

Relevance
Meets Standard The information presented seems relevant in the culture section.

2/28/2018 Evaluation by Paul
Overall Comments Looks great, man! I would just do about one thing. Keep reading to see what that is...

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard Good job!

Language
Meets standard Good Job!

Organization
Meets standard. Hey! Yet another good job!

Coding
Meets standard. I would probably have added a link to Rita Atria, but other than that it looks great!

Validity
Meets standard. Super valid!

Completion
Meets standard. It's complete. We are one step closer to the end.

Relevance
Meets standard. As relevant as it gets.