User talk:Bportis/sandbox

=Evaluations=

Spelling/Grammar
Meets Expectations Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 00:13, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Language
Meets Expectations Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 00:13, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Organization
Meets Expectations Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 00:19, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Coding
The citations you have look good, but you might want to consider leaving links to other things within Wikipedia, such as Photokina and Gamescom, so people can do further reading into the subject. Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 00:26, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Validity
Meets Expectations Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 00:26, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Completion
Meets Expectations Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Relevance
Meets Expectations Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

1/29/2018 Evaluation by caleb26
Good work. I'm looking forward to seeing what else you add.
 * Points: 39.5/40
 * Grade: 99%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard I would look at the "...worlds biggest..."

Language
Meets standard You could consider slightly adjusting the word choice for "...but will be run over two days starting in 2018..." to make it appear more encyclopedic.

Organization
Meets standard. Both paragraphs are organized logically with respect to the topics they are detailing. The first being the photography topic and the second being the gaming and developer conferences.

Coding
Exceeds standard.

Validity
Meets standard. The information cited appears to be valid. A good portion of the information is provided by the organizations who are being written about. However, there is also information regarding the gaming conferences provided by the New York Times.

Completion
Nearly Meets standard. The assignment is of the correct length. However, in regard to the requirement of the three peer review academic sources this article would need a few more.

Relevance
Meets standard. Given the number of people in attendance at these events it seems likely that these conferences are relevant to this city's page. However, I might suggest condensing the description of the gaming and developer conference and linking to the wiki page that directly addresses the topic of the conference.

Shayla's Peer Review
Language[edit source] I would say that it almost meets my expectations. The only suggestions I would make is to rephrase this sentence: "...a biennial event during 1966, and is now held every year", and change "every year" to "annually' since biennial was used previously in the sentence. Also, I would suggest that the phrasing after this sentence: "Devcom was originally a five-day conference, but will be run over two days starting in 2018." and change the last part of the sentence to: "...and will be shortened to two days starting in 2018." In this sentence: "Whereas Gamescom is made with gamer's in mind," I would suggest changing the "whereas" to "while". (These are optional suggestions.)

Organization[edit source] Meets standard. The information is clearly written out for the reader to follow along with.

Coding[edit source] Great. I don't know much about coding so I'll leave it at that.

Validity[edit source] Exceeds Standard. There are more than the minimum requirement of sources that seem to have good detailed information about the topic.

Completion[edit source] Meets standard. This page has more than three sentences of information and gives the reader a good basic overview of Gamescom and Devcon.

Relevance[edit source] Meets standard. This information is up-to-date and even includes future predictions with evidence to back it up.

Sources[edit source] Exceeds my standards. These sources seem to contain good evidence on the topic, however the only comment I would make is that I wasn't sure if we were allowed to use newspapers as sources since they may be considered biased: (example the New York Times article.) If I'm wrong, please ignore this.

Citations[edit source] Almost meets expectations. I would suggest adding a citation after every sentence that contains information that was researched. If there are multiple sentences together that come from the same resource and the last sentence of this group has a source number after it, than I would suggest leaving it as it is.

References[edit source] Good

Ending Notes: Great job Ben! I think you did wonderful on this project as I was unaware about this topic. As a newbie to gaming, it was thoughtfully written out and organized well for me to follow. Enjoyed reading more about Gamescom and Devcon, as it reminded me of watching in the documentary last week about the book conferences that also were held in Germany with many different types of books written in different languages. If you have any questions about my comments please don't hesitate to email me at shayl3@pdx.edu so that I can better clarify. Thanks! And keep it up!

Shaywah (talk) 17:49, 30 January 2018 (UTC)Shayla