User talk:Bradley0618/sandbox

Lead Section-Bradley Foster
A behavioral change can be a temporary or permanent effect that is considered a change in an individual's behavior when compared to previous behavior. It is sometimes considered a mental disorder, yet it is also a strategy used to improve such disorders. This change is generally characterized by changes in thinking, interpretations, emotions, or relationships.[1][2] These changes can be either good or bad, depending on which behavior is being affected. Often, it takes much more work to change behavior for the better than it does to experience a negative change. Article in "Psychology Today" Medications can cause this change as a side effect.[3][4] The interaction between physiological processes and their effect on individual behavior is the basis of psycho-physiology. Several theories exist as to why and how behavioral change can be affected, including behaviorism, Self-efficacy theory, and the stages of change model. [Bandura, A. (1977). Self-efficacy: Toward a unifying theory of behavioral change. Psychological Review, 84(2), 191–215. https://doi.org/10.1037/0033-295X.84.2.191 A journal article that covers the essential parts of the Self-efficacy theory. Bradley0618 (talk) 02:19, 2 April 2019 (UTC)

'''Thanks for completing your lead. This looks good. I docked a couple of points for being late. Just need to move it to your sandbox.''' J.R. Council (talk) 20:15, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

How I altered my article
Firstly, I went and added more information to the first paragraph under "Clinical and physiological treatment". I also went through and added some more details about the particular behavior types. In the second paragraph of that section, I added some information and links to cover the use of illicit substances when it comes to behavioral change. I also went through and created a summary and conclusion section. This briefly covered the entire article, added in some concluding statements, and reemphasized the main points.Bradley0618 (talk) 01:30, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

Feedback
Nice work on your draft. I made some formatting changes - section headers, for example, should not be capitalized, nor should they repeat the article title. I moved the references after the punctuation, which is where the Wikipedia style guide says they should be. I almost added tags to mark the places where you still need to add references.

Wikipedia articles don't have "conclusion" sections, so I renamed your "Summary and conclusions" to just "Summary". It should probably be the first section after the lead.

I have a few concerns with some of your references. The second one, "Ambient influence" comes from what appears to be a paper delivered at a computing conference. I recommend that you find something from a journal, not a conference proceedings, that's more recent and from a psychology perspective. I'm more concerned about your opioid reference - it's from 1979, which was a lifetime ago, especially in a field like opioids. The opioid crisis has driven a lot of research in the last decade - anything you say about opioid effects should reflect that. As a whole, you should try to find sources that are from the last decade, and for anything related to diagnosis or treatment, you should be looking at things from the last 5 years. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:33, 3 May 2019 (UTC)