User talk:Bradley Goldsmith/sandbox

Update 2.16: Thanks for the great feedback! I will implement the suggested changed posthaste (and likely add a picture of Faraday's theoretical models if I find one!) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bradley Goldsmith (talk • contribs) 18:06, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

I think this is a really clean introduction, I would recommend adding in the page links for the more complex physics terms/key figures in this! There's also no source for how Maxwell's equations impacted Albert Einstein, could be of use to get one. Overall, this is written in a very straightforward and unbiased manner. Ellamarrero (talk) 18:36, 14 February 2020 (UTC)

Great job! I think the rewrite could mostly benefit from linking other Wikipedia pages (i.e. Albert Einstein, electromagnetism, etc.) Sejohnson1 (talk) 04:44, 15 February 2020 (UTC)

Bradley, are you going to put something up here for the final? I'd like to provide peer review, but I'm not sure where to find your article. --JoFraDe (talk) 04:18, 18 March 2020 (UTC)

I waited as long as possible to allow you to put up your edits.... but I still dont see them, so I cannot provide any feedback... Redheadweek13 (talk) 16:27, 18 March 2020 (UTC)

The overall content of this article is fairly robust. I know that it is tricky to write about a book on Wikipedia, thanks to my Midterm, but I think that some more comprehensive information regarding the book's contents would prove illustrative. Additionally, I think it would benefit your article to edit and trim down the existing lead, which is slightly clunky and possesses minor grammatical errors. You could possibly include relevant information cut from the lead in an additional section. Also, I believe that Wikipedia asks you to repeatedly provide citations at the end of each sentence, not just at the end of a paragraph; this is a problem I face as well. Finally, while not all of your sources would serve as useful citations, I suggest you include information from more of your sources not cited. Overall, though, I think that the page is structured well, and will be a fascinating article. --JoFraDe (talk) 18:32, 20 March 2020 (UTC)