User talk:BrandiKnapp21/sandbox

Comments on Bibliography
Brandi: This is a tough topic for this species, and I think you've probably picked the best ones from the list. It's great that you have included the links for all you sources in your bibliography, but in addition you should give the proper full citation.Njclum (talk) 02:00, 12 November 2016 (UTC)

Outline
Communication

·Snout is used for hunting, smelling predators, and breathing. ·Tactile and chemical communication is mostly used. ·Visual, tactile, and vibration are perception channels they have.

Behavior

·Turtles can be aggressive especially when defending themselves. ·They bury themselves into mud ·They can give off a painful bite, but doesn’t do any damage ·They rarely move outside of their own areas of comfort. ·They don’t bond very well with humans, therefore they’re not good to have for a pet.

BrandiKnapp21 (talk)

Rough Draft
Asiatic soft-shelled turtles have different ways of communicating. They have a snout that is used for hunting, smelling predators, and breathing. They also use tactile and chemical communication. They have different kinds of perception channels such as visual, tactile, and vibration. Asiatic soft-shelled turtles can get very aggressive especially when defending themselves. They bury themselves into mud in order for protecting themselves. They can give off a painful bite, although it doesn’t do any damage. They rarely move outside of their own areas of comfort. They don’t go anywhere where they would feel unsafe or tense about being uncomfortable. There’s not much information about their territorial behavior. They don’t bond very well with humans, therefore they’re not good to have for a pet. BrandiKnapp21 (talk)

Final Draft
Amyda cartelgenea have different ways of communicating. Their snout is used for hunting, smelling predators, and breathing. They also use tactile and chemical communication. They have different kinds of perception channels such as visual, tactile, and vibration. When a threat is perceived, asiatic soft-shelled turtles have the tendency to become aggressive. They can give off a painful bite, although it does not cause significant damage. Additionally, they bury themselves into mud in order to protect themselves. Asiatic soft-shelled turtles avoid areas outside of their comfort zone or anywhere they feel unsafe or tense about their environment. They have minimal interaction with humans and do not bond with them; therefore asiatic soft-shelled turtles would not make suitable pets and have not been domesticated. BrandiKnapp21 (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 18:37, 2 December 2016 (UTC)

Hi Brandi! I included some minor changes below. This is a tough topic to write about! The sources were reliable and the information was neutral. Great job!

Amyda cartelgenea have different ways of communicating. Their snout is used for hunting, smelling predators, and breathing. They also use tactile and chemical communication. They have different kinds of perception channels such as visual, tactile, and vibration. When a threat is perceived, asiatic soft-shelled turtles have the tendency to become aggressive. They can give off a painful bite, although it does not cause significant damage. Additionally, they bury themselves into mud in order to protect themselves. Asiatic soft-shelled turtles avoid areas outside of their comfort zone or anywhere they feel unsafe or tense about their environment. They have minimal interaction with humans and do not bond with them; therefore asiatic soft-shelled turtles would not make suitable pets and have not been domesticated.

Joannairene (talk) 02:54, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

Amyda cartelgenea have different ways of communicating. Their snout is used for hunting, smelling predators, and breathing. They also use tactile and chemical communication. They have different kinds of perception channels such as visual, tactile, and vibration. Amyda cartelgenea have different ways of communicating. Their snout is used for hunting, smelling predators, and breathing. They also use tactile and chemical communication. They have different kinds of perception channels such as visual, tactile, and vibration. They are largely solitary except during breeding. They bury themselves for both protection and hunting. When a threat is perceived, asiatic soft-shelled turtles have the tendency to become aggressive. They can give off a painful bite, although it does not cause significant damage. Additionally, they bury themselves into mud in order to protect themselves. They have minimal interaction with humans and do not bond with them; therefore asiatic soft-shelled turtles would not make suitable pets and have not been domesticated. Asiatic soft shell turtles do not have very good eye sight. Given their habitat they live in which is canals, streams, ponds, they therefore have fuzzy vision.

Comments on Rough Draft
Brandi: This is a difficult topic but you've pulled out some useful information. I would organize it by sensory modality: olfaction, tactile, visual. I wouldn't think that they have very good eyesight, particularly given the habitat they live in, which would explain the importance of smell and touch. Also, I assume they are largely solitary except during breeding? Do they bury themselves for both protection and hunting, or are they active hunters? What constitutes the comfort zone of Amyda cartilaginea? If you cna't define this, it's probably best to delete it.Njclum (talk) 23:54, 12 December 2016 (UTC)