User talk:Brando813

The article for School Choice provided by Wikipedia has the potential to be elaborated upon in various sections. This is particularly true when analyzing the history provided about School Choice. Development could specifically occur in describing the role School Choice facilitated in the past. Adding citations to confirm this notion would particularly benefit the Wikipedia page, since it theoretically details how segregation can be mitigated through choice. The “Segregation” section does a sufficient job on articulating many of the shortcomings School Choice presents, such as a lack of access to transportation. This issue is most pertinent for low income families. The School Choice options included on the Wikipedia page are well described, however elaboration could take place in listing additional School Choice options. The added schooling options would include Inter/Intra-District public school choice (open enrollment), Online Learning, Customized Learning, and Town Tuitioning. Technological based learning such as Customized Learning and Online Learning might be signs of an outdated Wikipedia page, since these forms of learning may be relatively new. Including these variants of School Choice will make the page more coherent, detailed, and comprehensive. Although all of the forms of School Choice were not listed, it does list countries that did conduct education reform. This supplementary information would aid the reader in analyzing certain fundamental themes of education reform. This article also has numerous footnotes, however many of them are out-dated since many of them lead to the error message “404 not found”. Wikipedia has also tagged many sentences with “dead link” or “citation needed”. This would definitely something I would attempt to amend. This is evident in the three sources provided citing who the founders of EdChoice are. Many of the statements that do use facts, include citations to relevant sources. Additionally, some of the sources are written with bias, however the author included information from an opposing viewpoint to verify the claim. This is made apparent in the “Support” section, under Debate. This article also utilizes many hyperlinks, which provides a way to quickly reference additional information. However, this article might have overdone it, since it hyperlinks ideas that are common knowledge such as human rights. Concerning the Talk Page, this element does not include a grade. This might be detrimental in further understanding the conversation surrounding this vitriolic topic. Also, the absence of a Talk Page will hinder the ability to see perspectives that were not brought to my attention. This Wikipedia page articulating School Choice does achieve many of the objectives discussed in class and in the modules. There are many citations included throughout the page, however many of them need to be updated. Additionally, hyperlinks were overall effectively used in this article. A large part missing from this page that was stressed in our instruction, was concise writing. At times the article becomes a little “wordy”, which causes the message to be muddled. If more editing and proofreading were conducted by the contributors, the writing would probably be much more sound and coherent.Brando813 (talk) 04:27, 8 March 2018 (UTC)