User talk:Brandonmp5/sandbox

Khrisley's Peer Review Perla De Leon Personal Life Noteable Works References
 * I'm still getting used to making a Wikipedia page so hopefully my feedback helps somewhat. I know mine is lacking, but we are here to make each other better :) The structure of my feedback will be by the sections you have as well as the module that was given.
 * There is not a lot of information on your artist beside her birth year and where she was from. You could possibly expand more on her style of art/photography, how she became a part of the art world, or even who inspired her/taught her to pursue art/photography.
 * There isn't anything here, but I'm sure you will be adding information about your artist soon enough. If possible you can find information about her childhood that would be good extra information to add.
 * a picture as an example of her work could add to what you are saying
 * You could also expand on her work itself. You mentioned that she was one of ten people part of an exhibition, but I know nothing of her photographs itself. You can possibly add descriptions of her works if you cannot add an actual picture of it.
 * You only have two sources as of right now so I suggest getting more to strengthen your article.

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 * Right now you don't have much on your artist, so I suggest you dig deeper and find more information. Where she was taught (if she was educated in her style of art/photography). What inspired her to pursue the art career
 * You basically have an outline of what you are going to do. Just go more into depth of why your artist did what she did and how she did it.
 * add more citations and paraphrasing. Add different viewpoints.
 * “As middle-class populations shifted to the suburbs and new highways cut through thriving neighborhoods, many cities began to experience economic and social disintegration, especially in black, Latino, and working-class communities,” --> possibly cite this so it doesn't get flagged or anything. Maybe paraphrase.
 * You need more sources to make your page stronger.Khrisley (talk) 03:31, 20 February 2019 (UTC) Khrisley Castillo