User talk:Branngu/sandbox

Hi Brandon, I think your addition will be very helpful to the Wikipedia community. Your sources well noted and your tone was informative and fitting for Wikipedia.

I would recommend: -adding a picture, so the reader can see how the heavy chain looks. -creating a smoother transition from the first to second sentence. You talk about the sections of a heavy chain and then jump into what a immunoglobulin unit consists of. Perhaps explain the significance of heavy chains in immunoglobulin units to smooth the transition. -explain what the differences between the five types of immunoglobulin heavy chains. What differentiates them? A large amount of detail is not required, but it would clarify the concept for the reader.

Suhasini66 (talk) 01:30, 29 March 2016 (UTC)Suhasini

Major points: I think your page could benefit greatly from a picture, it would be really helpful to visualize the different regions specified in the description on the antibody. The description of the different types of immunoglobulin heavy chains could use some work; maybe a section explaining the differences in structure/function between the 5 different types, if there are significant differences. The myosin section could use expanding-it looks like you're in the midst of expanding it so that's good. Looking forward to your next revisions, it looks like there's potential for some really good work here.

Minor points: Nothing really of note here.

Seanchan26 (talk) 23:42, 29 March 2016 (UTC)

Peer review
The biggest issue I see with this is that on the talk page for heavy chain, someone already said they thought that the heavy chain article should be merged with the immunoglobulin article. Maybe you can explain (on the talk page) why you think the way you're going to change it is more effective

Major points
Nice intro sentence. From there, the article gets fuzzy. Information within the Function in Antibodies section doesn't seem to be strictly about the function in antibodies; there is descriptive information of the structure, and then specific information about immunoglobulins. More headings and subheadings may help clear things up. Looks like you're beginning to develop the myosin section, so no comments can be made on that yet.

Minor points
Because this is in its beginning stages, general advice like adding external and wikipedia links, adding images (if you can claim your own), and rewording ideas so they are more manageable for the wikipedia's audience may be helpful. Sdb27 (talk) 17:55, 7 April 2016 (UTC)