User talk:Breaktime002

Hello, Breaktime002, and welcome to Wikipedia! I hope you like the place and decide to stay. Here are some pages you might find helpful: I hope you enjoy editing here and being a Wikipedian! Please sign your name on talk pages using four tildes ( ~ ); this will automatically produce your name and the date. If you need help, please see our help pages, and if you can't find what you are looking for there, please feel free to leave me a message or place " " on your talk page and someone will drop by to help. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 05:41, 16 April 2011 (UTC)
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I want to thank you for your recent contributions to this article. They greatly expanded it and are properly cited, however the tone of the prose is overly commercial. It contains may terms that are considered what WIkipedia identifies as weasel words and peacock statements, which sets a tone that is overly promotional instead of being more neutral. I took some time and fixed some of the structural errors, but left the prose as it was.

Good job in expanding this article, and welcome to Wikipedia. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 06:10, 16 April 2011 (UTC)