User talk:Breanalloyd/projectdraft

Excellent start to your page. As you continue to work, think about the links to other Wikipedia articles you might want to include. Mosterbur (talk) 14:49, 20 October 2018 (UTC)Mosterbur

HollyAnderson2698 Article Draft Peer Review
Your article is off to a very good start. There were a few slight grammar things that I saw, mainly just the wording of things. Also, when using acronyms, try explaining what they are. For example, when you wrote "ICRC Delegation to the EU, NATO". You can try putting parenthesis next to them and writing out what they stand for and or outside of parenthesis describe what they are. Also, have there been any other events that the Belgian Red Cross has helped with either in the past, present or any that they are planning on helping with in the future? — Preceding unsigned comment added by HollyAnderson2698 (talk • contribs) 20:02, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Response to Holly Peer Review
Thank you for reviewing my wiki project page. I have taken all your comments and reviews into consideration and I have made the proper changes. I have revised my grammar and overall writing composition. I am currently working on my neutrality and avoiding persuasive wording. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Breanalloyd (talk • contribs) 20:26, 5 November 2018 (UTC)

Hprmartins (talk) 20:45, 5 November 2018 (UTC)Hprmartins Article Draft Peer ReviewHprmartins (talk) 20:45, 5 November 2018 (UTC) You've explained the Belgium red cross very well. If you can find more services and projects to add onto that section then it would look more complete and put together. Even mentioning old accomplishments that may seem too outdated to mention, mention them anyway. Maybe also think about mentioning the history and organizations before mentioning their mission, that way those reading it can first read about the page topic and then get into what the Belgium red cross is actually trying to do. You have "umbrella organizations" as a subheading it looks like, i would change whats under it to look different, like they look the same instead of "umbrella organizations" looking like a leading header. Grammar looks great and your formatting works well. Adding a few others sources will strengthen your article even more.