User talk:Breannamccann/sandbox

Ethan's peer review The first section is well written but I am not sure if it is proper to give a history of voter id laws like it is given on a wikipedia article. The current Pennsylvania voter Id laws section is excellent. There is a slight chronology issue in the next section. Very impressive list of sources and external sources. Article is 99 percent perfect, some of the language doesn’t seem exactly wikipediaish but this is likely fine.

Erin's peer review
I thought there was a lot of great information in your article. The only real problem I had with it was some of the language. Some of the sentences were very wordy or awkward. For example, you start off the article with "34 of the 50 states have a form..." It seemed off to me to start off with a number like that. I would at least spell out the number so it looks more appealing. Good job otherwise! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Eelst175 (talk • contribs) 19:30, 6 April 2018 (UTC)