User talk:Bria1207/sandbox

Hot Comb Notes: The first sentence in the hot comb section seems unnecessary, as it is clear from the sub-heading as to what you will be discussing. I would like to see more information as to how the hot comb differs from the pressing comb as well, as you say it was reinvented, but I am unsure of what that entails. Does Diana Turk have a wiki page? If so, I would directly link her as you did with Grateau. The sentence fragment "..used oil and heated on a stove" is unclear to me as to its meaning. Heated what on the stove? Was there a typo when transferring this quote?

Head Wrap Notes: I did not know that head wraps were used to protect the hair. Very interesting! "A head wrap is one of the types of hair maintenance primarily styled by African-American women" is a somewhat confusing sentence. I would describe what the head wrap is made of and how it is worn to protect the hair of African-American women. "...with the intention of  “ leaving her forehead..." has an extra few spaces between the words "of" and "leaving." "South Carolina's Negro Act of 1735," unnecessary comma here :) " codes was to mark" extra space here as well What were the status symbols? Did head wraps symbolize an elevated or lowered social ranking? "Since then, following several periods of the natural hair movement" there is a comma required after the word "movement" I feel that the last sentence should be included earlier on in this section.

Looking at the first source, I am unsure as to how the pressing comb relates to a catalog of fruit. The other two sources look very good. Your article took a very neutral standpoint on the topic, as it should.

Overall, really good job! The word count is about 100 words below the requirements, but you should be well on your way to getting this submitted and accepted.

Chloelogan (talk) 17:47, 24 May 2019 (UTC) Chloe Logan