User talk:Briannariv/sandbox

Betsy's Peer Review
Interesting topic! I think many people know about the medical and cultural models of deafness, but don't know as much about the social model so this seems important.

A few notes: -Although I understand what you mean in the first paragraph (as a person familiar with the deaf community and models of disability), I am not sure that it will make sense to many readers. I would suggest making this section as explicit and straightforward as possible.

In the second section: -I like that you included Deaf Institutes as an example of disability as socially-constructed, but I would reframe it from more of a strengths-based perspective.

-I would be careful in this section regarding generalizations and non-neutral phrasing. For example, do "many members of the deaf community find common grounds with peoples with disabilities?" Also, you reference deafness as a "so-called disability" and mention "the inappropriateness of the Social Model rests on this and other examples in which efforts to promote inclusion at every level produces negative impact on deaf individuals."

-Another example to illustrate that being deaf is socially-constructed disability is Martha's Vineyard and how everyone signed there (and, therefore, it wasn't viewed as "bad" or "disabling" if you were deaf)


 * Hi Betsy - I thought I had already responded to this. Thank you so much, this was incredibly helpful! Briannariv (talk) 22:00, 1 April 2019 (UTC)