User talk:Bridgetcollis/Manta trawl

External Review
Hello Bridgetcollis - My name is Jolie, and I'm the Project Coordinator for the WikiProject Limnology & Oceanography team. Your external review for your article on the Manta Trawl has been posted below. If you have any questions about your review, or would like to clarify anything, please feel free to get in touch with me by leaving a message on my talk page, and I'll pass it along to your external reviewer. Thanks, and all the best as you wrap up your Wikipedia editing assignment!

EXTERNAL REVIEW

About the reviewer: My name is Tricia Thibodeau and I’m a postdoctoral fellow at the University of Rhode Island, School of Oceanography. I received my Ph.D. from William & Mary studying Antarctic plankton. I consider myself a biological oceanographer and my research focuses on phytoplankton and zooplankton ecology from the Southern Ocean to the Northeast United States.

Manta trawl

Lead section: This description is a concise and appropriate description of a manta trawl and I think it makes sense to keep the original paragraph as is.

Infobox: N/A

Body of the article:

Paragraph 1:
 * Erikson is not consistently spelled throughout this paragraph. In the third sentence it is spelled Eriksen.
 * Include the numbered reference where the quote is cited from in the first sentence.
 * I think the second sentence should be reworded. I suggest changing to, “Through this research, the pervasiveness of microbeads in the marine environment was determined.” If there is a scientific study reporting this discovery it should be cited here.
 * I’m also confused about the second part of the sentence, “…multiple campaigns across the U.S. began in order to further stop marine plastic pollution.” Were these ‘campaigns’ with the manta trawl or political campaigns to prevent marine plastic pollution? Also, I suggest changing ‘further stop’ marine plastic pollution to ‘preventing’ marine plastic pollution because no campaign has suggested stopping marine plastic pollution because that would mean an end to plastic production all together (which would be great but unlikely at this time).

Paragraph 2:
 * Verb/noun disagreement in first sentence. Should read, “Most manta trawls typically weigh”
 * “Being able to collect samples of plastic and other debris.” This is not a complete sentence. I suggest removing it.
 * Link ‘Planktology’ with the wikipage that describes it like what is done in the original first paragraph of the page.

Paragraph 3:
 * Extra line between paragraphs 2 & 3 should be deleted.
 * The citation for this quote seems to be cutoff.

Gallery/Images: N/A. It would be nice to provide an image of a Manta trawl as well as Marcus Erikson if possible.

References: References are legitimate, but they need to be cited in a correct reference format (i.e., APA or MLA) like what is done in the original wikipage for this topic. Numbering the citations within a References section and including the subscripts in the text where the references are used would also be useful.

JoGDelta (talk) 20:25, 12 April 2021 (UTC)