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Article Evaluation - WGST WIKI first attempt
Stoneman Douglas High School shooting

Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?

-Everything is relevant to the topic. It was hard to read this article because it happened so recently and the news was very fresh, but the information within this article was relevant

Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

- This article reiterates the facts surrounding the massacre, however it does appear to be biased towards stricter gun laws. I feel that it is important to point out that the survivors from the shooting are calling on the US government to make changes, so it is related to important information. The topic of this article is heart breaking, especially when it seems as though the violence was preventable. It is hard to not read the information from a biased standpoint, which may in turn change how I interpret the information. This article seems to support stricter gun laws which is a belief that I hold firmly.

Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?

-The citations are linked to credible sources that support claims from within the article.

Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?

-The facts are referenced with up-to-date information. The shooting happened so recently that the information in this article is subject to change.

Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?

-It appears as though the information is being monitored and updated. The "talk" section of this article has a list of edits.

Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?

-It is mostly edits on how to use terminology correctly and linking appropriate sources for the information.

How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

- A lot of our class is opinionated or discussion oriented. This topic is set up to give factual information sequentially.

Adding Citation
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ammonia#Toxicity

Statement "The toxicity of ammonia solutions does not usually cause problems for humans and other mammals, as a specific mechanism exists to prevent its build-up in the bloodstream. Ammonia is converted to carbamoyl phosphate by the enzyme carbamoyl phosphate synthetase, and then enters the urea cycle to be either incorporated into amino acids or excreted in the urine.[citation needed]" Citation added

Bridgetedavis (talk) 19:17, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

National Women's Front Wiki Edit Rough Draft
This article is about the National Women's Front. It's an organization started in India geared towards equality for women. The article talks about the programs and campaigns as well as future events. Upon examining this article I've found that there are several edits that need to occur. First, there needs to be a background section for this article. The initial title, Formation Objectives, does not completely explain the organization and copies from the website, without recognizing the source. The formation objective title should be changed to background and can include the updates that I've made to the page. Finally, I will make sure that the links connect to an active and relevant source.

Recommended Changes

Background

Women in India The fight for women's rights is a complicated societal issue in India today. The status of women is making strides towards gender equality, but women continue to struggle against patriarchal standards. Despite the steps towards gender equality, women still face brutal and devastating abuse from society. India has a staggeringly high rate of rapes, while physical assault and acid attacks are on the rise as well. The National Women's Front was founded with the hope of empowering women in the fight for justice and equality.

Bridgetedavis (talk) 01:20, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

History of the Organization

India has been independent for several decades, but the fight for gender equality and women empowerment continues. Although NGOs and humanitarian organizations lend support to women's rights in India, but western approaches to feminism may not provide the relief necessary. . In 2009, the National Women's Front was launched to "create a platform for women through which women can stand up against injustice and fight for their rights". The organization started and worked in three states, but is now working within eight states. The aim is to provide support and encourage women living in rural communities that are often overlooked by the government to fight for their equality.

Bridgetedavis (talk) 19:52, 3 April 2018 (UTC)

Rough Draft Part II
Recommended Changes Continued

The National Women's Front wikipedia page lacks any current updates and background information about women in India. After the updated background.

Background

The fight for women's rights is a complicated societal issue in India today. The status of women is making strides towards gender equality, but women continue to struggle against patriarchal standards. Despite the steps towards gender equality, women still face brutal and devastating abuse from society. India has a staggeringly high rate of rapes, while physical assault and acid attacks are on the rise as well. The National Women's Front was founded with the hope of empowering women in the fight for justice and equality.

Bridgetedavis (talk) 01:15, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

What's Working
What's working. I've enjoyed researching articles and linking them to my wikipedia page so that readers have access to an in-depth history of women in India. I think that my background area is organized well and I think it will help contribute to the organization of the actual wikipedia page

What's not working. There is very limited information on the National Women's Front. Other than adding background information to the introduction, I do not have many areas that I can add to on this website.

Where I need help. If you have suggestions about information I can add or ways I can restructure the article, it would really help me finalize the wikipedia assignment.

Bridgetedavis (talk) 01:15, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

Miranda Ross Peer Review
I am a little confused by your rough draft and how it would look on a WIKI, but this is the best I could figure it out to review:

Introductory Sentence: I think your first sentence is a little biased. I would just say that a common societal issue or just a societal issue instead of complicated. Summary: I think your summary needs to talk more about the Women's front instead of gender inequality in India. Context: The information in the summary is echoed in the history section. Good. Organization: I am confused as to how this would look on the actual wiki, but the information is clear.

Content: You use a lot of strong language like devastating, etc. Try to remove those types of words and make it more factual instead of emotional. Maybe clarify which states they work in and how they actually do work to make the page more fleshed out.

Citations: Everything you have down has a reference, so good work. Sources: Your citations are really well done, and are from great sources. Completeness: Looks complete. Mlross18 (talk) 16:43, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer review - Toree
Introduction: Maybe don't use as much biased language in your intro. Summary: Good information, do you have a little more information on the women's front? Context: Good context Organization: The information is easy to read through, I know it will be more organized with the final draft Content: Make your use of words a bit more factual instead of opinion based Citations: You did great with your citations Completeness: Looks complete and ready to be turned into a final draft. good job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Toree Thompson (talk • contribs) 19:11, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

Background
Women in India

The fight for women's rights is a complicated societal issue in India today. The status of women is making strides towards gender equality, but women continue to battle with patriarchal standards. Despite the steps towards gender equality, women still face abuse from society. India has a high rate of rapes, while physical assault and acid attacks are on the rise as well. The National Women's Front was founded with the hope of empowering women in the fight for justice and equality.

History of the Organization

India has been independent for several decades, but the fight for gender equality and women empowerment continues. Although NGOs and humanitarian organizations lend support to women's rights in India, but western approaches to feminism may not provide the relief necessary. . In 2009, the National Women's Front was launched to "create a platform for women through which women can stand up against injustice and fight for their rights". The organization started and worked in three states, but is now working within eight states. The aim is to provide support and encourage women living in rural communities that are often overlooked by the government to fight for their equality. Bridgetedavis (talk) 08:57, 26 April 2018 (UTC)