User talk:Bright.140osu/sandbox

=Instructor Comments No. 2=

Well-written

 * Good work thus far
 * Would like to see more on the geography of the area.
 * Residential Section would be useful. Doesn't need to be large, but if you can take a photo of a few homes that would be great.
 * Try linking to other articles inside wikipedia using double brackets.

Verifiable with no original research

 * Well done here.

Broad in its coverage

 * Again, would like to see residential.

Neutral

 * No issues here.

Stable

 * No Comments.

Illustrated

 * Good work on the photos.
 * Try adding an info box at the top of the page; see Arena District Example.

Kenitzer.1 (talk) 15:22, 9 December 2014 (UTC)

Hello! My name is Chad and I am peer editing your page for our CRP2100 final project. I have a few edits bellow, which I listed under the particular section in which they appear. Overall, think your page looks really good! I imagine content for this neighborhood is pretty slim, but did you find in info on cultural/entertainment aspects to the neighborhood? Are there any particular businesses of note that are located in Riverbend? I feel like your page could use at least one more section to round out the content? Otherwise, keep up the good work!

Intro section
 * The opening intro section about the neighborhood should have the boundaries of the neighborhood included, or at least move the Geography section up above the History section.

History

 * The link to the Virginia Military Land is a dead link. Perhaps link it to an external website that talks about this land?
 * It is not clear what a "260 land holding" is. Did you mean 260 acre land holding?

Landmarks and Notable Locations
Heinzerling Foundation
 * I might revise/rearrange this paragraph a little to make it clear what the foundation is, before telling where it's located or when it is open.

The American Legion
 * The sentence " The Legion itself was chartered in 1919 as veterans." Did you mean "charted by veterans"?

2nd Draft
Notes from the class editor: in the Big Run Park section don't say it is 'considered' one of the biggest parks, it either is or it isn't, find out which. I would add sections for entertainment and demographics as well. Otherwise it's pretty solid Kowalski.118 (talk) 13:45, 9 December 2014 (UTC)