User talk:Brinney/sandox

Alexandra's peer review
Note: I am not sure if this is the correct thing to review but I am reviewing the couple sentences in your sandbox.

Your contribution about Indian women is good because it is factual and neutral. It might benefit from more information concerning Indian culture and experience around menopause because the other areas of the article that mention differing cultural experiences expand upon their experiences more than your sentences did. For example, maybe add more information about why the women were happy to experience menopause. Also you may want to make note of where in the menopause article you are planning on placing these sentences.

Other things you might want to consider contributing is to double check the cross-cultural information already present in the article. For example, cross check the information about the experiences of Japanese women during menopause.

Overall, your information is off to a good start. --Fullerm8 (talk) 20:07, 21 November 2018 (UTC)

Great, thank you for the feedback! I feel that this is very helpful in developing my ideas. I struggled in knowing what more to add to my excerpt as I wanted it to be my own voice. I definitely think that I will add more information about why they are happy to experience menopause and try and expand on how this compares to other cultures such as the Japanese cultural feelings towards menopause. I will be adding it to the Society and Culture section of the Menopause article. Armm0321 (talk) 21:40, 26 November 2018 (UTC)