User talk:Brisknikki001/sandbox

I would also like to add that the article, even though it has 7 sources, it does not appear to use those articles at all. There is not any information regarding treatment, history, and even the definition is vague.

problem #1- references are used in sufficiently problem #2- no information regarding any treatment, history, long term effects etc.

two references: Ginger, Serge; Ginger, Anne (2012). A Practical Guide for the Humanistic Psychotherapist. London: Karnac Books Ltd. p. 157. ISBN 9781780490472. Dayton, Tian (August 2003). "The Neurobiology of Emotions: How Therapy Can Repattern Our Limbic System". Counselor, The Magazine for Addiction Professionals. 4 (4): 64–66. Archived from the original on 2013-09-20.

Questions: Since this article is just a stub and does not really have a lot of information, could we start anywhere with this article? or is there a certain place we should work on revising more than the other? Brisknikki001 (talk) 03:39, 25 February 2019 (UTC)

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Nice work on your draft. Some formatting issues first
 * References go after punctuation, not before.
 * Only capitalize proper nouns and the first word of sentences. This applies to section headers as well. So "Trauma loop" rather than "Trauma Loop", and "Limbic imprint" not "Limbic Imprint" in the opening sentence. You shouldn't capitalize "limbic system" either.
 * Only the article title should be bolded, and then only in the opening sentence
 * You should italicize book titles and species names, but not a whole lot else.
 * Section headers shouldn't end in colons

Content issues Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:47, 30 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Your lead section has no references. That's OK if the content is just a summary of referenced content in the article body, but it doesn't look like that's the case here. Granted, content in the lead should be in the body of the article, since the lead is just supposed to be a summary of the article content. So that might be the better fix here.
 * Make sure that everything in the article is tied to a reliable source. Sources should follow the content they support. There shouldn't be any content after the final reference in a paragraph.
 * The second-to-last section, "Some other suggested strategies include:" has a lot of problems. You should be writing full sentences. You also shouldn't be giving advice. Wikipedia articles can't give instructions or advice.
 * In the last section you give some "pop culture" links. Leave that out.

Comments for Ian
Hello Ian!

I have made a few edits for you to look at. Please let me know what else needs changing. Thanks!

Brisknikki001 (talk) 16:22, 30 April 2019 (UTC)