User talk:BrittanySchneider/sandbox

Rating = 2. Overall, this is a very good article and just needs a few fixes to be publishable. There are a number of typos, punctuation, and grammatical errors throughout the article. Also, just some poorly worded sentences. You need to proofread very carefully and make corrections.

For example, here is a problem with grammar/poor wording: With O’conner, Lorr, and Stafford’s development it allowed patients and doctors the ability to better understand where patients needed the most help with their anxiety problems.

Other poor wording/misspelling: Some of these have to due with personal recording.

Typo: Of Their research Quarter and Laxer found

Again, these are easy fixes. Just proofread thoroughly and correct.

''I did a proofread tonight of the page. It would help for at least one more person to look at it and make final changes! I fixed some phrasing, spelling, and grammar. -Lizzie (5/6/14) ''

I agree
Thanks Brittany! Some more eyes should look at this before I do the final read before approval. J.R. Council (talk) 20:14, 7 May 2014 (UTC)

Little evidence of additional work on this
I have read through this once more, as well as looked at the history, and I can see little evidence that anyone has done any additional work on this since Assignment 9 was due. Even the errors that I listed in my previous comment have not been corrected. Brittany, you said you proofread and made corrections on 5/6, but the History page indicates no changes by you. There are changes indicated for 5/7, but no way to tell who made them. Perhaps you forgot to log in. I think Emily may have also made some edits without logging in. J.R. Council (talk) 20:15, 8 May 2014 (UTC)

More Edits
Did a few more grammar and phrasing edits this afternoon. Hoping this gets us a little closer to publishing. (5/11) -Lizzie — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lizzie mcnamara (talk • contribs) 23:30, 11 May 2014 (UTC)

More Edits
Tonight I worked on grammar, punctuation, word choice, and sentence structure. I did a heavy read-through of the entire document. - Brittany

Final edits
I made a few minor edits, and I think the article is almost ready. There are a couple of things that still need attention. 1. The Adult Manifest Anxiety Scale does not have a reference when it is first mentioned. Also, it is not clear how it relates to the TMAS. The TMAS is already an adult scale. It would seem more accurate to say that it is an adult version of the CMAS. 2. In your reference list, many words in the titles of journal articles should be capitalized. For example, scale names and the following: manifest anxiety in japanese, french, and united states children. This article also appears twice in the reference list.

Don't worry about making these changes right now. You can take care of them after the final. J.R. Council (talk) 17:21, 12 May 2014 (UTC)

Don't forget to make final changes for publishing and let me know when you do
This is really close. Easy extra points now, so just make the last couple of corrections and you should be good to go. J.R. Council (talk) 20:29, 14 May 2014 (UTC)

Finals Edits...Hopefully
I fixed the source that was the issue and I made sure it only appeared once. Also I tried to reword the opening of the Adult Manifest Anxiety Scale section, I'm a little fuzzy so I am hoping that the intro fixes the problem. - Brittany

I am still not happy with this
You guys are trying, but you are not proofreading carefully. Here is the first sentence in the section, The Adult Manifest Anxiety Scale: "in 2003 a more specific Taylor Manifest Anxiety Scale was created, it was referred to as the Adult Manifest Anxiety Scale it was specified by three different age groups.[11]" Also, every time I read it, I find more grammatical errors that I've missed before.

However, I still believe that this article is worthwhile in that it adds important new content to the existing Wikipedia article. Please do your best to polish this up on Sunday, and I will take another look at it. I think I will have to do some final editing myself. I am in Chicago and will get back to Fargo Sunday afternoon. I will check this article later after I get back. J.R. Council (talk) 05:39, 18 May 2014 (UTC)

Polishing
Just did some final polishing up. I am going out of town tomorrow, but hopefully will have computer access at some point tomorrow night if anything else needs to be fixed. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lizzie mcnamara (talk • contribs) 21:21, 18 May 2014 (UTC)

I have cleaned this up for publication
This article needed lots of editing for grammar and logical flow. Look at history if you want to see what I did. I cut out a lot of redundancy, wordiness, and unnecessary details.

The section Applications and Limitations of AMAS needs a reference citation.

Put in a link for Association for Psychological Science

Okay, now it is ready to publish. Let me know when you do. Remember, don't just delete what's there already. That should not be a problem, because the existing stub is very short. Just write around it. J.R. Council (talk) 17:46, 19 May 2014 (UTC)

Publication
I published this article to the Taylor Manifest Anxiety Scale wiki page. I added the citation and the link you asked for into the final page I published. Thank you - Brittany — Preceding unsigned comment added by BrittanySchneider (talk • contribs) 02:53, 20 May 2014 (UTC)