User talk:Brittanyknuckles

Peer Reviews
Brittanyknuckles- I really enjoyed reading about your person and I think that you did a good job with all of the information you were given. I know that most of our journalist don't have a lot of information about them but from what I've read about your person you did a good job researching. There are few suggestions that I would make but they are somewhat like the suggestions below. Overall I think you have done a great job and I really enjoyed reading your aticle. -Kortni Bultman — Preceding unsigned comment added by KortniEditor (talk • contribs) 02:20, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

Based on the criteria in Crtew’s Rubric, I have made some suggestions...

Who, alt names, bio dates, nationality, job, medium, & outlet & city/country of outlet, and notability

- It would be helpful to provide a separate brief intro/beginning to the article to give the reader a preview before jumping directly into the events surrounding his death. Also, look into adding an info-box to work in conjunction with the intro, the code for making one is in the Word document Dr. Tew posted.

Death: What happened? (who, what, where, when, why, how (many)) - If you were able to find the date he was killed, as well as the specific cause of death, I would suggest adding that to the Death section.

- I can’t really comment on Context, Impact, or Reactions sections, but the Word document provides ideas for things to look for in the sections lacking information.

Personal and Career Data - I didn’t have much in these sections either, but if you know how long he worked for each of the outlets you mention, that could be added. If you could find the names of his spouse and three children, that could also strengthen this section.

Internal & External Links and References - If you could reference the websites, from which you obtained certain information, within the article after each new fact, it would help the reader, allowing them to explore those aspects more deeply. As for external links, I couldn’t find any either.

Also, don’t forget to remove the instructions (from the Word document) from the article.

-AMDurchholz

Critique
Work on the lead!

The would include notability in the lead and under impact. Why is this journalist important? This is essential because you have to tell Wikipedia and the readers why this person deserves an entry in an encyclopedia.

Find out more! Reactions can give you a clue as to notability.

Notability is also important: CREATE THE CONNECTION BETWEEN YOUR JOURNALIST'S DEATH WHILE REPORTING TO Iraq War insurgent attacks AND THE LIST OF Suicide bombings in Iraq since 2003. I BELIEVE YOU HAVE BEEN SEARCH TOO NARROWLY ON YOUR PERSON AND NOT BROADER ABOUT THE PHENOMENON OF SUICIDE BOMBING.

AMDurchholz was right about the detail. Keep the 5ws and the h in mind when you write. I think you're searching too narrowly on your person and not broadly about suicide bombings in Iraq and the impact on journalists.

Don't create an orphan, which is an article without any links pointing to it, and likewise don't create an article with no outgoing. This is easy. I started you off. You finish it.

Give the facts but also give facts that help us put the person into perspective. You still have several underdeveloped sections: Impact, Reactions being among them. The reactions are a clue to the significance. Find out more and develop the article before you submit.Crtew (talk) 06:15, 28 October 2011 (UTC)

Submission
Since you were writing this on your main use page there is no submit button. You need to create a User page on your journalist.Crtew (talk) 15:01, 28 October 2011 (UTC)

Evansville meetup
You're invited to help plan and attend Wikimedia's very first Evansville meetup! Bob the WikipediaN (talk • contribs) 02:51, 2 May 2012 (UTC)