User talk:Brittconigs/sandbox

Hi Brittney! This is Xintong Di, your peer from the writing class. I noticed that you made several slight changes in the existing article and added a large part in the "Signs and Symptoms" part. One good thing about your draft is that you merged the original one and your edition together so that we could see the changes clearly. From the signs and symptoms, I can tell you must have done a lot of researches. The format is great. The sentences are all straightforward and clear. Very nice draft! Xintong Di (talk) 05:02, 17 June 2018 (UTC)

Hi! This is Amy (thank you for your patience with the status of my own draft). I like that you bolded the stuff you added; it makes it much easier for me to parse through what's your writing and what's from the original article. I noticed that most of your statements lack references; for example, the statement about cerebral concussion being the most common form of head injury (obvious statement though it may be, it still needs a reference). Some of your wording is also a bit confusing; I would suggest reading it out loud to yourself and to a friend to make sure it makes sense. However, I love that you include links throughout the text to other relevant articles! This is a great start. -Amybarch (talk) 20:46, 18 June 2018 (UTC)